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I sit down at my desk
Pick up my favorite pen
Take a piece of paper
Settle back, and then
I find myself at a loss
Over the words I should say
I stare at the blank
Bit of paper all day
Wondering how
I could ever tell
You what's in my heart
And how I can spell
All that burns
Deep down inside
All the things
That I've never tried
To tell you before
To let you know
To ask you to stay
And never let me go
But how could I find
(Though I searched the whole earth)
The proper words to say
Just how much you're worth?
You are all I am
The beginning and the end
You mean everything to me
On you alone I'll depend
But every time
I try to tell you, my dear
The words I thought I'd say
They up and disappear
I think I'll never find
The one word to convey
The way you take my breath
Till I have no words to say
©2007-2009 ~dark-amethyst
:icondark-amethyst:

Author's Comments

This poem was inspired by Vic Mignogna's song "Je N'ai Pas De Mots (I Don't Have Any Words)." I love the message in that song and music video; I think many people can relate to that. This poem is for all my loved ones: family and friends alike. I have no boyfriend, so this was not intended to be romantic, though it can certainly be read that way. All of my family, and the friends I've made in "real life" and on the internet, are all very special to me, so special that I can't find the words to express it.

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:icondailenna:
;_; I heart you too! I really like this one - the metre of it could be improved in some places, but the first four lines just had me at that. You couldn't have started it any better, I reckon. The last four lines are awesome too. Gorgeous poetry.

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No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist - Oscar Wilde
:icondark-amethyst:
^_^ Thank you!! I normally don't pay much attention to metre (that spelling is so much prettier than meter!), and I suppose my poetry suffers for that. I'm glad you like this one so much, though. Do you know "Je N'ai Pas De Mots"? (Did I link you to it sometime?)

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Baby's on the half-tip.
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I believe in Jesus Christ as my Savior. If you do too and aren't scared to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.
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Anti-feminist: Why fight for a cause that's already been won?
:icondailenna:
Yeah, you linked it to me :D As soon as I saw it in your comments, I started singing it out loud. Chorus only - I don't know the rest :P Still, most of it was just humming XD

Note: please pay attention to metre. It makes a poem so much better, if it has a rhythm. If you're going to rhyme your lines, having the metre out makes the rhymes seem out of time as well. Poetry that isn't rhyming (like most of mine) doesn't need metre as much, but it still adds a bit of a balance to it.

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No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist - Oscar Wilde
:icondark-amethyst:
My favorite part of the song:
"Come near and talk to me, baby
How did you know you were the dream of this dreamer?
Oh God, how I thank you for reading
In my heart the note
I didn't even know that I wrote
Of what I longed for
You gave me much more
Love is standing beside me"

Okay. I'll try to pay more attention to metre from now on. My poem "Lullaby" is my latest poem where I paid attention ^^'

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Baby's on the half-tip.
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I believe in Jesus Christ as my Savior. If you do too and aren't scared to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.
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Anti-feminist: Why fight for a cause that's already been won?
:icondailenna:
Haha, good, you should do that. Have you seen my poem "Pirate Jim the Tax-Collector" [link] ? I'm not sure if I linked it to you or not, but if you need to get an idea of metre, that's definitely one for it. I had to be really careful with it, because each couplet rhymes in three places, so metre was essential.

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No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist - Oscar Wilde
:icondark-amethyst:
Ooh, fun! I like the poem, kind of funny and weird and random XP

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Baby's on the half-tip.
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I believe in Jesus Christ as my Savior. If you do too and aren't scared to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.
---
Anti-feminist: Why fight for a cause that's already been won?
:icondailenna:
Haha, I like it for the random story. I'd write more like that if I had any ideas XD

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No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist - Oscar Wilde
:iconryupantherboy:
I like it. you have...a very nice style of writeing.

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I hate loneliness, but it loves me.

I know where i am but I don't know where i am going.

I am fighting a war within myself, with no end in sight...
:icondark-amethyst:
Why, thank you! I'm so pleased that someone's reading my stuff! ^_^

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Baby's on the half-tip.
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I believe in Jesus Christ as my Savior. If you do too and aren't scared to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.
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Anti-feminist: Why fight for a cause that's already been won?

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